Past Students Work

'South Paw'
I think 'South Paw' had a clear story line as the mosque had a good contrast with the music and it showed the main boy running past after looking at the mosque. Also the typography of the graphics had an edgy look to it making it fit to the music which also suited the theme of the work. However some of the weaknesses of the work was that the camera zoomed in several times whilst filming and this made the scene look very unprofessional. Another weakness is that the audio level was really high. Also during the whole work, there was not a lot of things going on and they had less camera language. I gave the work a level 2, with a score of 24 out of 60. The real score was 34.

'Fast Life'
'Fast life' chose the right music for their work as it related to the starting shots, however the audio levels here were also very high. The graphics were hard to read as they appeared on the screen for only a quick second. The good thing is that the scene started with an establishing shot however there was a limited amount of shot types which is why I gave this work a level 2, 30 out of 60. The real score was 32.

'Damaged Goods'
I think this work was an overall good production. The graphics were on for a fair amount of time and the typography was suitable. Also the music suited the story line which was clear. The costumes, which is included in the mise-en-scene, was also very good and suited the story line well. The only downside to the work was that the production has very bad lighting, making it very hard to see clearly what is happening in the shots, as well as very loud music overlapping the dialogue. I gave this work a level 3 with 36 out of 60. The real mark was 57.

'Suffocation'
I think suffocation had a really clear good story line and this is shown really well. I think the strengths of this work was the lighting, the music choice, and I liked the way they added the graphics to a building pile of work. This relates to their title well. Nevertheless, I think the cast could have been rethought as the person playing the main man, looks really young to be working. I gave this work a 45 out of 60 which is a level 3. The real mark was 42.

'Bridges'
I think bridges had a lot of weaknesses, such as the graphics were too small, the editing didn't really make sense and also how the music stopped. This showed that the work was incomplete. Therefore I gave this work a 20 out of 60, being a level 1. The real mark was 29.

'Drained'
I think this work was one the best ones from the previous years. The graphics were done really well. The location was chosen wisely and the story line was very clear. However there were a few things I thought let the production down. This is the dialogue of the work and also the casting. The main male actor did not suit the role of the scene. I gave this work a 49 our of 60. The real mark was 58.

'Maze'
The graphics in Maze was really good and suitable for the genre. Also the story line was clear and this was shown through the good range of camera shots. However I think the music was too loud and too upbeat which did not suit the work at all. I gave this work a 40 out of 60 making it a level 3. The real mark was 56.

Further Analysis of Drained

This mid shot is successful as the graphics are in the corner and not interfering with the image.
I would improve this shot by using a low angle instead. This would connote that he is a powerful character in the film.

I would change this shot as I think the work overall has too many mid shots. Instead, I would use an over the shoulder shot from a high angle so that you can see her from the mirror and you can see her facial expressions and so that you know she is a weak person in the film. This would make the shot look more interesting.

I think this would be a great way to use match on at ion instead of showing her just coming down the stairs and opening the door and going outside. I would show her opening the door and then she her from the other side locking it. This would look more professional.

As much as I think the lighting in this shot reflects the mood of the boss, I think the shot should have lighter lighting. Also I think to show that the boss is angry, I would show him very angry through his actions like make him throw things aggressively.

I think this is a good shot overall as the two shot connotes that the relationship between the boss and the worker is not very good as they are standing with a distance between them. I would not improve this shot.

The last thing I would improve is that in this shot, I would show some people already working in the factory as then it would look more professional rather than showing that theres only the boss and the girl working here.








Further Analysis of Bridges

I think this was a good starting shot as it shows a lot of things such as the location, the era and the type of main character. I would to change this shot.

The thing I would change about this shot, as well as the others, is change the graphics to black. This makes it easy to read.

This shot is not an over the shoulder shot. The film so far consists of only mid shots so I would change it to a long shot. Also I would show an extreme close up of what the boy is showing the man. I would also turn the audio level very low when he is talking so you can hear what he is saying.

This shot is really confusing as you don't know why the man is coming to them. This is because the story line is not clad enough. To improve, I would show that the boy is saying something or doing something to the girl and she doesn't like it so the man goes to them.

 I think this is a good shot as it shows the theme of the film and also the location. I think it is also good as there are people inside the shop to show that it is an everyday thing.

I like the typography of this film as it connotes that the film is a crossover about culture. Also the writing is bold and big. I wouldn't change the title.